A site for May Day, an effort of poets from Winnipeg and beyond, taking place for the eleventh time in May 2015.
Monday, May 11, 2009
Crow 5
the bird the body
the victim flesh killed by the court
and banned from the graveyard these crows black once red now
3 comments:
sms
said...
o these are so interesting jonathan... the one comment on Crow 5, and bear in mind that this comes from the queen of crappy punctuation, is that I think you need a , after "black once, red now" unless you want the ambiguity... it reads "once red" which I'm not sure is correct.
This is a great set of images. I like the use of one syllable words. Actually the the way you dole out syllables to conrol the rhythm is a pleasant economy.
3 comments:
o these are so interesting jonathan... the one comment on Crow 5, and bear in mind that this comes from the queen of crappy punctuation, is that I think you need a , after "black once, red now" unless you want the ambiguity... it reads "once red" which I'm not sure is correct.
forgive me if I'm off on this one (I usually am)
yay jonathan been missing the corvids
hm yeh the last line did confuse me i read
these crows, black, once red, now
(inserting my own commas incorrectly. do all readers do this?)
i like "killed by the court, banned from the graveyard"
This is a great set of images. I like the use of one syllable words. Actually the the way you dole out syllables to conrol the rhythm is a pleasant economy.
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