32. Why Xujun's Composition Never Wins Oscar

I would like to comment on xujun's illogical composition.

He said in his story after a heart attack and he was lying in the hospital bed, he was able to know that ten minutes ago he was still alive and well. Can anyone tell me how you send a person to hospital, cure the person of heart attack and wait for the person to wake up in ten minutes? This is total crap.

And when he had a heart attack and was lying down on the floor waiting for help, he could still think of who was the person trying to poison and kill him, and does not seem to be in much agony. Wow, marvellous, I would like to see him demo to us.

And after that he knew it was his sister who poisoned him, then when she came to visit her brother with food, she gave the brother the food and Xujun said in the compo that the sister said "don't worry" and "I'm not going to hurt you, eat." UNCONVINCINGLY (that's what xujun wrote), the brother still dared to eat the food. Should I say this as stupid brother or stupid writer.

He also wrote that the brother traced the source of the bitter almond smell, all the way to the bowl, which is just right in front of him in his food. This is shit, he's less than 30cm from the food on his plate and he has to TRACE the source of the bitter almond smell which is from his food? He is not an ant right, so 30cm shouldn't be a very long distance.

And not to say, the food was poisoned food contains cyanide. So the cyanide reacted with the HCl in the stomach to form hydrogen cyanide. Then his face turned blue. God knows what the hydrogen cyanide did to his body? Rot his flesh? And why did his face turn blue? Is it because the food tastes horrible?

Not to mention all his crap chemistry. This is like him teaching Mrs Teo science, 班门弄斧.

Overall, this is an illogical dumb shit compo which I could hardly continue and want to tear into half and no more than half. I finally know how Miss Tan feels marking Xujun's compo. I sympathise with you, Miss Tan. My condolences to you. Could I leave him to rewrite his crap compo, Miss Tan?

Labels: composition, xujun

posted by datf @ 8/27/2007 09:25:00 pm 0 Comments